Okay, the fiction bug has hit me, and it has hit me hard. I keep creating situations in my head and pick up traits from every one I meet!! Before it becomes an obsession, I want to quickly pen things down. In the coming times I am going to take up a fiction challenge and want to write only fiction for sometime! Or till I get over with the fiction bug.
My prompt for the week has come from Lillie's Blog. And here you go. Read and Enjoy. Read my earlier Five Sentence Fiction, and 55Fictions if you like.
The Lucky Man
Jake felt nice meeting his
friends at the college re-union party after 6 years, he was doing good professionally
unlike many of his classmates, and had everything - a Veyron, a pent house,
girls, parties but somewhere inside he still felt empty.
As he watched his friends coming
in with their partners, wives and husbands, he noticed that bright face with
deep auburn hair framing it, and that infectious smile – they looked still the
same, just a little more poised.
The years spent at college replayed
within Jake and he knew why he still felt empty, the girl who loved him so much
was sitting right across, but she was not his, not his anymore, not after what
he did to her, not after all his years of lying and cheating - now she was
seated with Ted, her newly wedded man.
Jake walked up to her table and
looked at her, the same way he used to back in those days but her face was
blank, she didn’t know how to respond, and shook Jake’s hand unwillingly.
Jake patted her husband with a
pleasant smile and said softly “You are a Lucky
man Ted, take care of your wife, not everyone is so fortunate”.
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Leave a comment below if you liked this short fiction and if you want me to write some more. Your words mean a lot to me.
Was it a tongue in the cheek remark?Seems pretty mean of him who had lied and cheated her
ReplyDeletehaha.. not a tongue in cheek actually. He cheated on someone who loved him, now he has everything but without love. so that's how it connects
DeleteThank you.I am happy you have been caught by a fiction bug.I look forward to loads of short stories.My blog is essentially a story blog.
DeleteYou are welcome KP, read your series of 55Fiction and quite liked them.
DeleteBrilliantly done! I guess we should be thankful that the fiction bug has caught hold of you
ReplyDeleteThank you iwrotethose, I hope to write more fictions in the coming weeks. Thanks for the encouragement.
DeleteBrilliantly done! We readers are fortunate that the fiction bug has caught hold of you
ReplyDeleteWEll written :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Ananya
DeleteThis was very good. I like how you set the scene, and then the closing. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteThis was very well written. I like how you set the scene, and the closing was excellent. :)
ReplyDeleteNice story Tina :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Swathi
DeleteYou can't just get over some people. Nice.
ReplyDeleteThank you Janaki
DeleteNicely written and powerful.
ReplyDeletehttp://mcguffysreader.blogspot.com/2014/03/lucky.html
Thanks Ann
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