Thursday, June 19, 2014

Five Sentence Fiction - The Inseparable Sisters

Okay so this one is my third post of the day! And did I call myself not an active blogger??? Anyways, I just got the prompt for the Five Sentence Fiction from Lillie's blog in my inbox and thought of coming up with a flash fiction before delaying it further and forgetting it altogether!


Here it is.


Read my previous 5 sentence Fictions and other short stories here.

The Inseparable Sisters

Leena & Mahi were inseparable, no one could tell they were first cousins and not own siblings.

There wasn't a day when they didn't played together and they visited each other when one was sick, after all that was the advantage of staying next door.

That day when they were playing doll house in Leena’s room, Mahi’s mom rushed and picked her up and left in a hurry before Leena could say a good bye to her friend.

It’s four months now since that dreadful day and the two sisters have not met or spoken a single word to each other.

Their lives and homes are fenced forever because of that silly argument between their fathers and the only thing Leena and Mahi could do was to pray to be together again.


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35 comments:

  1. That's a nice fiction Tina! Short and appropriate to convey your idea. :)
    I wish they could be together again!

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    1. So do I Umang, there are times when we see such things around. Thanks for dropping by.

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  2. Tina this is a wonderful story, though it's sad.

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  3. Nice story.
    But if you merely allude to what Dad said, how do we know it was silly?

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    1. Hi Adrian thanks for dropping by. I understand your query, but my idea was to state that even if the parents/elders fight/have arguments/have differences kids shouldn't get affected with that nor should there be any restriction on the kids to communicate

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  4. Nice story.
    But if you merely allude to what Dad said, how do we know it was silly?

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  5. nice story Tina!
    you have presented the innocent friendship fenced due to elders argument beautifully ! :)

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    1. Thanks Crimson Curls, its sad when elders do not try to understand friendship or relationships

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  6. It's sad when families fall out...definitely causes fences...

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  7. So sad, makes you hope they can finally get back together at some point in time.

    D.B. McNicol
    Romance & Mystery...writing my life

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    1. Yes Donna, in my story they definitely will :)

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  8. People fight for flimsiest reasons and it is others who have to bear the burnt. Nice one.

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  9. So sad how this happens. You did such a great job to write from the perspective that you did.

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    1. Thanks for your kind words Cammies on the floor.

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  10. oh that was such a petty reason for the girls to separate! We adults are often so not thoughtful when it comes to such situations.
    Interesting read :)

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  11. Awww, how sad for them. We adults erect the most ridiculous fences, I tell you!

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    1. Shailajav, you are so true, all problem starts when people turn adults, loss of innocence doesn't do much good

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  12. Sad, but a fact......many innocent souls get separated from each other over such trivial issues....it can be heart breaking!!

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  13. Sad for the cousins..maybe they could re-unite the families later on?

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    1. Yes they would if i write down the story :)

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  14. This happens so often, doesn't it? And it is really sad that it does.

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    1. Yes it does Shail and it shouldn't, not at a level that innocence gets affected

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  15. Good take on the prompt Tina. Sadly, it's all the more true in India, where families get into tiffs over silly reasons.

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  16. Oh perfect Indian tale this one :)

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  17. The elders of the family fought and the younger ones had to bear the brunt.Not fair.

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    1. Yes Kalpana, in reality when things like these happen they are never fair. Thanks for dropping by

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  18. Nice story. Simple but with so much meaning. And as you said it is a prequel to my story :-D

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