Saturday, July 12, 2014

Five Sentence Fiction - The Letter

Each time he saw Mischa, he was mesmerized with her simplicity and beauty.

Everything felt nice whenever he thought about her, he had spent days together day dreaming about her – holding her close to him… very close to him, if Rob wanted anything in life , it was her.


“How long am I going to just love her like this… she doesn’t even know about my feelings… Does she even know anything about me?”

But he didn’t have the courage to go and speak to her… not now… not so soon… he didn’t want her to see him stuttering – something that he couldn’t help, but he decided he will not remain silent.

That night he wrote pages after pages - he wanted to write everything… the day he saw her first four years back, the times he had just followed her only to see if she was safe, the days he have spent dreaming about her… the nights that he have spent without blinking an eyelid thinking only and only about her, but it seemed his heart was also stuttering that night.




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This post is for Lillie McFerrin Writes Five Sentence Fiction and the prompt was Pages. 

Also linking this to The Ultimate Blog Challenge July 2014 as my Day 12 post
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15 comments:

  1. Beautifully written - and a very nice site, Tina :) (From the UBC)

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  2. Beautifully written with emotion and feeling.I really want Mischa to find out about her secret admirer.

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  3. I had never heard of five sentence fiction. This is very cool!

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  4. Poor lad. I was so hoping he would actually get the girl of his dreams. Will there be more? I really hoped he would finally tell the girl he loved her. Love a good love story.

    http://cattitudeandgratitude.blogspot.ca/2014/07/ubc-day-12-dark-clouds.html

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  5. All right --- you are going to have to let us know what happened1

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  6. The girl was lucky to get someone who loved her unconditionally! I so wish there was than five sentences to this story. It would have made a good read to know what happened next!

    http://swathishenoy.blogspot.in/2014/07/phubbing.html

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  7. How I wish he expresses his feelings....good one :)

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  8. Does Rob post the letter? If he doesn't out of nervousness, all the labour of love is lost. very sweet romance, Tina.

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  9. This is a great beginning...now, please finish the story!

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  10. I had never heard of five sentence fiction, either. I sometimes tend to ramble. This would be a good discipline for me. Alana visiting from UBC.

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  11. Now, I just wish he gives the letter to HER! :)
    Beautifully crafted :)

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  12. I would love to read all those pages :)
    A good build up :)

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  13. I like the heart stuttering part - that's a unique way to describe his feelings - and I do understand!

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  14. I so hope he gives her that letter!!

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  15. "he had just followed her only to see if she was safe"

    A very interesting thought he had. Look what the society has made us and the lovers! "Need" for protection for just being a girl.

    A totally offbeat point it was.

    Nice story.

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