Thursday, July 17, 2014

Five Sentence Fiction - Standing in the Rain

She stood still like a stone…. Trying to absorb what just happened.

She looked at them down at her feet… lying helpless… lifeless… but she felt indifferent today.

These were the very people who dared to violate her… repeatedly… day after day… was it her fault that she was born in a family of laborer and them in a higher caste?

She didn’t think of consequences today… she didn’t trust in the police anymore… she took reigns in her own hands when they pounced on her today… it was not the sickle, she realized she got the power from her courage… from her want to lead a life of dignity.

Standing alone in the rain today, she felt calm, she felt the almighty washing away the dirt… she felt pure again.


source: somethingweird.hubpages.com


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This post is for Lillie McFerrin Writes Five Sentence Fiction for the prompt RAIN. 

Also linking this to The Ultimate Blog Challenge July 2014 as my Day 17 post
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34 comments:

  1. I like that...my imagination starts running wild after these five sentences. Well done, Tina.

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  2. I'm glad she did. This was powerful Tina!

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  3. Nobody helps nobody nowadays,specially if you are poor. Great thing that the girl took charge. Nice post

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  4. A powerful representation of so much going on in this world right now, especially where women are concerned.

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    1. true Jayne... the world isn't quite a safe place

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  5. Right and wrong are not always easy to define, hmm? Well done.

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  6. A very good post...:)

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  7. Well penned! Your words have portrayed well the taboo she is going through inside.

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  8. I like the fact that I wrote my post before reading yours :) It is similar in theme but different in ending. Looks like she took things into her own hands. Well done, Tina.

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    1. I read your post Shailaja... its a very nice post.

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  9. More power to such women Tina. Tragic yet motivating tale Tina.

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    1. Yes its a tragic situation for women in this society

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  10. Where the land is not on your side, your hand has to be....
    Randy

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  11. Superb! The story is great. It is good that she took the things in her hands rather than continuing to face the insults!

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  12. More power to the girl! Very nicely penned, Tina!

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  13. A powerfully tragic tale. I think you portrayed her life struggle and eventual indifference to the people who had hurt her really well.

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  14. More power to every woman to fight such people. Good take on the prompt Tina :)

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